gentle grace

[machinery]

and I say oh gentle rapture of elegance & distortment -- will you dance for me - in front of me - in your black unders, free from your silk dress, on a black evening with a star-filled sky accompanying a crescent moon where the illuminations fall & peek in through the window and line your body with neon traffic glow, sway slow manuever watching your legs bend slowly shake twist grind your beauty upon the hard floor -- my arms raising, coming down to 'rouse your hair & throw me off - totally on - another rhythm, beauty in my head -- getting me to the point and you step closer, barefeet with black painted toe nails arrive more near to I - and I quiver - with excitement and wet torso - not closing my eyes fore I want to see you - see you move & wiggle soft motion vigirous into reaching...making me anxious to touch your outers, your switches -- now moist experienced madness, inside I'm wet melting, my eyes registering glories of you, beyond what you can think -- oh -- and how I want to act - enthralling myself - joining each other in the middle of this empty room I have not seen before (some temporary dream chamber I s'pose) - hands outstretched all sweaty nervous & off beat from my heart - twitching real bad -- can't remain calm in your presence - it shakes me, mentally almost physically reaching a point where I can't comprehend -- and you with those dark colored eyes & your smile of sexual hunger & bed deception, tongue slipping out through two plump kissers & moving slowly from left to right back to left - and my knees just shook from within, it feels as if you are undressing me with your stares -- speechless I am as our hands finally meet in this new lifetime we have made - arms going through & around each other - naked embrace sensations! Nerves knowing never existed just jumped and our lips pucker & reach each others wetness - alive we come & our bodies acheive words that our mouths can not.

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[This message has been edited by machinery (edited August 24, 2001).]

[ranter]

oooohhh....great...makes me quiver, hehehe...i like the turn in reasoning throughout. you show the narrator growing, making a stance, this is probably one of your best, i think, from a prose/poetic stance, great descriptions and feelings guide us (the reader) through an enchanting scene making feel there and free. (jaw drops, nothing else to say)

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[machinery]

one of my best? really? well um, thanks my boy....

I thought originally that i used too many dashes...but I don't know....

is there anything else???

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[parch]

What i like about this is something you will probably deny.

I can see
Jack
Rollins
Morrison
Love
Drugs
The interesting mechanical internet world
Work

All in this piece.
I see how they influence(d) what you write. I see how they help(ed) what you write. I see how what you write is not them. It is you. I see the elegance and undying beauty of Jack's emotion. I see the cut of Rollins. I see the colors of Morrison and his visions. I see how love has borne you inward. I see how drugs have shown you the cracks inside. I see the net escape in your words. Most importantly, I see how work has refined your art.

I do not claim that this is your best work or even one of your best. I believe you have and do often write better pieces than this. I honestly did not get lost in this as I would have liked to. It wasn't great for me. I did 'see' something though, and I hope you see it too.

[machinery]

that's a real nice compliment bro..thanks....i dont know what else to say....

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[parch]

just an observation

[Pixelina]

this is sooo cool. i really dig it. i like it that you say anything and it comes out so
well. the last line in this totally describes something i always tried to put to words. ironic, eh? but I wrote it on the back of my current notebook, like i do all the awesome quotes i come across...you're right next to "if the world does turn, and if london burns, i'll be standing on a beach with my guitar."
who's said that, eh?

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